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Born into privilege
And royalty
Beauty was admired and loved by many
She would hypnotize young men
With her loveliness and appearance
Becoming the symbol of their idolatry
Falling in love with her through their naïve eyes
Her complexion, an ivory white
Hair soft as silk flowing down her back in tresses
Eyes blue as the sea

Stories of Beauty
Circulated around the world
Men and women came to see
This girl who made the exquisite appearance
Of a rose pale against her looks

Beauty loved the attention
And lavished gifts were given to her
Anything she desired was at her disposal
But the one thing she dreaded most was upon her

Beauty feared things
Aging
For wrinkles to form
And her looks to wither away
For admirers to shrink away at her ugliness
The Truth:
She was beautiful and
All she possessed were her looks
The Deadly Sin of Vanity visited her daily

Beauty would spend hours in front of the mirror
Admiring her looks and her body
Perfection’s work at Its best
Looks to desire
Looks to envy

One day while admiring herself in the mirror
Vanity approached her
Beauty’s oldest and dearest friend
Friend, she was the only one who
Knew of Beauty’s fear of Aging

People loved Vanity
Her beauty was also well known
But was second to Beauty
Jealousy burned inside Vanity
Eating away at the beauty inside of her
Until she was hollow
Her beauty only living on the outside
Vanity vowed to rid Beauty of her loveliness

Vanity told Beauty that she should seek
Father Time
Beauty then quickly traveled to The Sands of Time
Seeking Father Time’s aid
Beauty found him there at the gates to the city
Waiting for her
Father Time told her:

“Woe to the one
Who bows and worships at the altar of Beauty
Because Heartache, Tears, and Jealousy are the only ones you will find
Your desire to admire
Must end.
You shall never gaze into a mirror again.”

Mirrors were expelled from her house
And banned from her town
But one survived that Vanity tucked away for safe keeping

Years passed
Men and woman
Admired Beauty
And Age never paid her a visit
But Vanity still visited

The desire to admire
Never left Beauty
It just grew and tempted her inside
Until one day she took the mirror out…
Just for a peek
Her refection beamed back at her
And before her eyes her reflection began to age
Beauty screamed as she dropped the mirror
Herself and the mirror hitting the floor
And shattering like glass
©2005-2010 ~sweetheart18
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Helped and inspired by Vanity by AurenGreenleaf.

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:iconaurengreenleaf:
Ooh wow O_O Nicely written narrative! :clap: Paints an excellent portrait. Better than my drawing I think. :) I like the format too, especially on this stanza:

“Woe to the one
Who bows and worships at the altar of Beauty
Because Heartache, Tears, and Jealousy are the only ones you will find
Your desire to admire
Must end.
You shall never gaze into a mirror again.”

:hug: Beautiful :)

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What a wonderful comment! Thank you muchly. Thanks for the fav too. =) I'm going to go through your gallery again and see if I can find anything that will inspire me again.

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Awwwe ...THIS IS SO GREAT. You have an excellent talent, my favourite stanzza in this is
Beauty would spend hours in front of the mirror
Admiring her looks and her body
Perfection’s work at Its best
Looks to desire
Looks to envy.

I think many girls would do this ...Or be reveresed and think of how ugly they are but the way you put this narritive is so well done :) Absoultly love it! :)

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Thank you so much for the fav! :boogie:

When I started writing this poem I originally planned to write it from the perspective of young girls trying to achieve beauty and having Beauty...but when I went to organize all my thoughts into a poem this is what came out. I might take some of the original thoughts and put it into a different poem. The idea of how society views beauty and what is "beautiful." (which is what I originally wanted but this came out.)

Thanks for the comment. =)

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that is one great story. =) i really enjoyed it. it really shows the self-consciousness that girls have... =)
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i like the story line of this poem
the ending is good too
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Ohhh that would be so awesome :) I love how this one turnded out but because you are such a great writer it qwould be so so so good if you have a try at doing the thing you intended..:)
I want to so congradulate you on this coz i really think this poem has a lot of meaning :) which i also think would come from that other idea :D
Just love it well done

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Thank you very much. I had such a hard time trying to end this poem. Nothing I came up with seemed right for the ending. It took me two or three days just to figure out how to end it. =)

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Thank you for commenting. =) Girls are really self-concious people. We always want to please and be love. The problem is that society really pushes the perfection beauty and how we have to look a certain way. The problem with that is that no two girls are actually alike so we all become really self-concious about ourselves.

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I think I'm going to go back through my original writing ideas and see if I can write a poem more centered on the self-conciousness of girls and to the extremes girls go through to be beautiful.

Thank you so much for the wonderful praise. :hug: This poem was actually hard to write and took me about half a week to write....i think it took me two or three days just to figure out how to end the poem.

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